Can Anyone Help Me With My College Essay?

the question is, indicate a person who has had a significant influence on you, and describe that influence. Please criticize it and tell me what you think or ways to make it better. Also does anyone know of any website that specializes in posting college essays to get feed backs.
1.Dr. Martin Luther King Jr. once said, “Faith is taking the first step even when you don’t see the whole staircase.” As a young boy I did not completely grasp the sacrifice that my parents made for me in order to have a better life. What would it take for someone to give up everything they know; to risk never being with or seeing family or friends again? When I asked my parents how they were able to do this, they responded with one word, “faith.” Faith guided my parents to emigrate from their homeland to a new country that they knew nothing about. The many obstacles that I have faced throughout this journey have helped me to define myself as the person I am today.

4.The work and sacrifices of my parents have truly changed my life, a memory I will always have is returning to Ecuador for the first time since I left. The first place my parents wanted to see was the apartment we had once lived in. As I opened the door and gazed around the astonishingly small apartment I understood why. At that moment I had an epiphany, I realized how far two immigrants and their son had really come, how much their sacrifices and hard work had paid off. After seeing where I came from and what I have become, I now know that no dream is impossible to pursue. To most people the American Dream is to become rich and famous. I am neither of the two, yet I still feel like I have been able to attain it. Having the possibility to go to college and become anything I want is the true American dream. The United States has given me the opportunity I need and my parents have provided me with the character I need to succeed. The staircase has been laid out for me, now it is my turn to take that first step into my future.